Alright adam here's the things you need to work on to get this approved:
adam is a nice person.he is a hard person to get mad.he will not take no for an anwser for somethin the he think is important.likes to talk walks on sunny dayd on earth.can make other friends with angels easy.
like to eat ramen in the human world.wants to be a master at the scythe and perfect his abilitys.
Grammar is very important when it comes to rp, which means no sentence fragments, and make sure to use punctuation, so your personality should look a little something like this.
Adam is a nice person, he is very calm so he doesn't get mad easily, also, he won't take no for an awnser once he's made up his mind.
That's pretty much all there is in your personality everything else is likes/goals.
For your wing incantation it needs to be an actual Incantation, not what they do, for an example, mine is "Slash through the enemy's bone and turn their blood to dust"
Last but not least, your history needs to include some of your human life, when you die, your convorsation with fate, and your life as an angel. As far as your rp sample goes, try to make it at least 3 paragraphs, to do this I would suggest using a former rp between you and somebody else, or if you don't have one, ask someone if they'd like to rp with you for your rp sample.